Rough Cut 2 Feedback

We received some feedback from our target audience age on our second rough cut in order to work out what we need to improve with our final cut. Feedback was received from the rest of the media class and a form group.

Feedback from 16/17 year olds

Good feedback:

• They like the pan at the beginning and the use of music
• The sound quality is good- you can tell what the characters are saying without the volume being too low
• They said there was a good variety of camera shots
• Good use of mise-en-scene with costume and setting

Improvements/other:

• Pacing needs to be made a bit faster
• The font of the titles could be changed

Feedback from 15/16 year olds

Good feedback:

• Most of them said they would want to see the rest of it
• They said the scene was established well
• The camera was steady
• Good use of sound

Improvements/other:

• Not everyone would've wanted to see the rest- this shows how not everyone will enjoy our film opening
• They hoped the pace would pick up

Feedback from 13yr old

Good feedback:

• Actors spoke loud and clearly, could understand them.
• Liked the funny costumes
• How they sat altogether near the tent - like a circle of friendship.

Improvements:

• Make the actors learn their lines more beforhand
• To see who was on the other side of the phone.

We will use this information in order to make changes and improvements necessary for our final piece in order to create the best film opening possible with what we have.

-Leyla Cindil, Sian Hayler-Magenis.

Rough Cut 2

This is our second rough cut for our film opening for Rural Superheroes.
It is important to create at least one rough cut before making the final film opening. By creating rough cuts, it enables us to see what works and to experiment with different shots, music and editing in general.



- Lauren Tween, Amy Bowman, Sian Hayler-Magenis, Leyla Cindil

Rough Cut 1 Feedback

Good feedback:

• Find it fairly funny
• Want to see what happens next

Suggestions for improvement:

• Make all titles pun names (as only having some gets confusing) or normal names

-Lauren Tween

Rough Cut 1

This is our first rough cut.



- Sian Hayler-Magenis, Leyla Cindil, Amy Bowman and Lauren Tween

Filming Diary

-Leyla Cindil

Filming Schedule

Our filming schedule will be set for 10.30am until around 12.30pm on Sunday 25th March. We will inform our actors a few days ahead of time to let them know the details and to rearrange things if necessary.

The actors will be 30 minutes later than the rest of us, to allow us time to set up and organise things beforehand- such as sort out tea in a flask. We will arrange to inform the actors of what we are going to be doing, what we will need to bring (props such as the tent, chairs, etc.) as well as give them their scripts and answer any queries or concerns they may have. Time will also be needed in order to arrive at our final location for filming on time, to set up the tent and any other equipment needed to be sorted out.

To ensure of actors knew when and where we were going to be filming, and to be organised, we made a filming schedule highlighting the meeting points, dates and times.  This is the letter we gave them:

Hello actor,

Congratulations on getting the part of Eugene Snodgrass/Doobie Journey/Mac Donald! 

As our film opening is set in the rural location of a field, we hope it will not be too inconvenient for you that we will need to film on a weekend.

The Gemini Team have already chosen the location, which is nearby to our meet-up point.  If you could meet at: 50 Glebe Crescent, Broomfield, Chelmsford, Essex CM1 7BJ, on the Sunday 11th April at 10.30am to leave for location at 11.00am, which is a short 10-minute walk from our meet-up point. 

If there are any issues with the date or timings, please let us know as soon as possible.  We hope you can make it! 

Thanks,
The Gemini Team

-Sian Hayler-Magenis, Lauren Tween

Final Props List

This is our final props list- small moderations have been made since we wrote out our original props list as we have put more consideration into the props that will be used.

-Teacup

The teacup we have specifically chosen was bought from Tescos as it has the word 'LOVE' written on it. We thought that this would be very suitable for the hippie as stereotypically they embrace the idea of love and peace. This teacup will contain tea that the hippie will drink from throughout the opening.

-Three camping chairs
The three camping chairs we will use are going to be provided by Lauren. These are the seats our characters will sit on as they talk and are used to show that they are a group of friends.

-Tent
The tent in the background of the shots will be used to show the characters are staying out in the middle of the field- emphasising the 'rural' part of Rural Superheroes. It will also show how they are an odd, different group of people. Lauren will provide the tent.

-Guitar
The guitar will be used to emphasise the farmer character's personality as well as to bring some diegetic sound to the opening. The guitar will be provided by Lauren and the music will be edited in later.

-Notepad and pen for register
The register will be used to help let the audience know the character's names in a different way from most films, as well as show how they are an odd group of people. The notepad and pen will be provided by Sian.

-Old fashioned mobile phone
The old fashioned mobile phone will be used to progress the plot and to connote with how the nerd character is not up to date with technology. As said before, this will be provided by Amy.


-Sian Hayler-Magenis

Final Storyboard

This is our final storyboard- it is not that different to our draft storyboard but we wanted to add more detail into the final one in order to make everything clear. We made sure that everyone put equal input into the making of our storyboard, if someone was drawing, then another person was writing down the key information that was needed on the frames.

-Leyla Cindil, Amy Bowman, Lauren Tween and Sian Hayler-Magenis

Final Script

The main changes between this and our draft script is that the description of what is going to be filmed has been made clearer- this is to make sure that both ourselves and our cast are made aware very clearly  of what is going to happen. This also avoids any confusion on the types of shots used and if needed we will be able to refer to our final storyboard if needed.

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SHOT FADES IN and MUSIC FADES IN

Pan across field of beautiful scenery, straight past tent - bird's singing, serene music.
Camera stops panning abruptly and focuses back to tent before zooming in on tent - music changes to upbeat acoustic guitar at this point.

Camera zooms right in to tent before focusing on 'RURAL SUPERHEROES' sign, camera continues around to front of tent where friends are sitting on chairs around table.
FARMER playing guitar.
NERD sitting awkwardly, looking around, annoyed expression at farmer.
HIPPIE drinking tea noisily, slurping, sighing, clinking tea cups and saucers.

Close up shot of hand picking up tea cup and sauce.

Close-up shot of HIPPIE drinking tea out of teacup.

Close up of glasses being cleaned delicately by NERD.

Mid shot of guitar being played merrily by FARMER.

HIPPIE loudly complains about the music.

HIPPIE (DOOBIE)

Duuuuude, spare my ears, my soul is crying inside of me. The flowers are weep-

NERD interrupts him and tries to settle everyone down in a sensible manner.

NERD (EUGENE)

-Please stop now, PLEASE! You need to take the register now.

MUSIC stops SUDDENLY.

FARMER shows sad expression.
NERD hands register to FARMER (who sighs heavily).

FARMER (MAC)

Doobie Journey?

HIPPIE puts hand up quite slowly, taking time to register his name.
FARMER looks up from register, sees HIPPIE with hand up and looks down again and ticks name.

FARMER (MAC DONALD)

Eugine Snodgrass?

NERD puts hand up quickly and excitedly, waving it around.
FARMER looks up from register, sees NERD with hand up and looks down again and ticks name.

FARMER (MAC DONALD)

Mac Donald? …Present.

Y’all here, as solid as the ground we stand on.

FARMER nods head and ticks name, chuckling to himself.

Phone rings in NERD'S pocket.

NERD hesitates before realising it's his phone ringing. He is shocked, happy and puzzled at the same time and pulls phone out of pocket, after frantically searching them all.

NERD (EUGENE)

What’s it doing?! Why’s it doing that?! IT NEVER DOES THAT!

NERD shows distress and excitement.

HIPPIE takes phone off NERD angrily, glaring at NERD.

Everybody looks on.

HIPPIE answers phone very slowly (builds tension) and puts phone to ear,
PHONE rings for  long time before HIPPIE finally answers:

HIPPIE (DOOBIE)

Heeeeeeeeey man, what’s up, what’s down?

….

Uh-oh.

….

Oh.

HIPPIE puts phone down with extremely worried look on face.

Cut to black.
-Lauren Tween, Leyla Cindil, Sian Hayler-Magenis and Amy Bowman.

Final Costumes

Our costume designs for our characters are mostly the same aside from the major changes being with the hippie's.
We decided his costume was too eccentric and unrealistic to be suited for our film opening- our design didn't seem particularly modern and the items of clothing chosen would have been difficult to obtain.
Instead, we have gone for a more simplistic and casual costume for the hippie:

• Brown/green shirt
• Patterned waistcoat
• Headband
• Peace emblem necklace
• Baggy jeans
• Converse/trainers

The original ideas we had for the costumes of the remaining two characters, the farmer and nerd, have stayed the same. We have decided to stick to the original plan for these characters as we believe that the costumes are not over the top, like the hippies first costume was. We think their costumes are enough to represent their stereotype, yet not unrealistic.

(Left to right) Nerd, hippie and farmer costumes.

-Amy Bowman, Sian Hayler-Magenis, Lauren Tween